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I followed a path, carved around a rock, a rather odd shaped path, somewhat matching the hollow stone that sat there. Moss and grass had gown underneath the rock, almost giving it a skirt-like feature. Or maybe it was a beard? Could this inanimate object be real? I dare move closer to it, now more curious as to its purpose. Gathering myself, trying to rid myself of the fear I was beginning to inhale, I touched it. Nothing. How silly I was to think this rock would have feelings. I climbed up on it, standing tall, overlooking the land, taking in the pastel colors of the sky. I felt a bit heady standing high, so I sat myself down on the stone.
As my feet dangled in the opening, a rather strange sensation came over me. I tried to draw my legs up but they wouldn’t move. I must have caught them on something. Desperately trying to remove them, I felt a resistance, someone or thing was holding me! Before I knew it, I was being dragged down, into the hole. Echoes of myself screaming as I fell deeper into the earth, blended with the laughter of another. The rock. He was not just an inanimate object, he was alive and I had angered him. With my last breath, anguished, I spoke the words, “I’m sorry”, but they went unheard. After all, a rock cannot hear…or feel…
Or can it?
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Photo ©Sue Vincent
Samantha Loves To Read said:
Oh my god. What a compelling story! Thanks for writing it and sharing it. You have also inspired me to write a story based off a picture. What a lovely idea! ❤
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Thank you so very much!! Sue’s #writephoto is new every Thursday. Do join in!! 🙂
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freiedenkerin said:
Oooooh, how spooky!
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Thank you very much! 🙂
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isaiah46ministries said:
Well, that was scary, but I really enjoyed it. But, I will not probably stand on any rocks on my upcoming adventures. Just saying! Better to be safe than sorry! Thanks for great story.
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Dorinda Duclos said:
I agree! No more rock climbing for me! 😉 Thank you for reading!
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Eliza Waters said:
Yikes! 😀
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Be kind to the rocks 😀
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Eliza Waters said:
😀
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willowdot21 said:
Well you have just told the tale so my guess is they can…. After such an horrific shock I believe the rock can trust you to mind your manners around him and his kind .😉😉
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Oh! I guess I did 😉 I will never disrespect a rock again!
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willowdot21 said:
Very glad to hear that 💜
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kim blades, writer said:
Very nice and spooky Dorinda!
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Thanks so much, Kim 🙂
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anuragbakhshi said:
Of course it can. The proof of the rock’s feeling, is in the eating (that it just did in your story)!
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Dorinda Duclos said:
I agree. They are not just a lump of stone 😉
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David Redpath said:
Rock ‘n’ Roll … Dorinda.
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Party on, David 😉
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Penny Wilson Writes said:
ooooo! spooky! 🙂
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Thank you, Penny! 🙂
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Thank you! ❤
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Sue Vincent said:
Oh but they can… and they whisper 😉
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Oh, I know. Awhile back I posted a pic of a rock with a face…a couple of days later, the face was gone. No one can tell me i was seeing things lol
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Sue Vincent said:
I wouldn’t! Ive seen that kind of thing too often myself, Dorinda 🙂
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Dorinda Duclos said:
I’m fascinated by it. 🙂
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Sue Vincent said:
Me too, Dorinda. I spend a lot of time with the stones 🙂
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Mick? lol It’s very peaceful, Sue
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Sue Vincent said:
I prefer my antiquities even older 😉
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Ritu said:
Can it…? A thought to be contemplated Dorinda!
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Dorinda Duclos said:
Oh yes, I whole-heartedly believe they can!!
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Ritu said:
😀
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